Well done this is a detailed analysis of thee sequence you've chosen. well done for using media terminology and exploring the impact of the sequence on the audience. Target: add an introduction to your work - it begins too abruptly - you need to include context. Also work on using discourse markers to link your paragraphs to each other and the question you're answering.
Well done this is a detailed analysis of thee sequence you've chosen. well done for using media terminology and exploring the impact of the sequence on the audience. Target: add an introduction to your work - it begins too abruptly - you need to include context. Also work on using discourse markers to link your paragraphs to each other and the question you're answering.
ReplyDeleteI have responded to your feedback by including an introduction and adding discourse markers where appropriate.
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